Refineing the first draft

In order improve our mark, we had to come up with new exiting ideas to push our project forward. There fore we brainstormed and filmed new "artsy" shots to be featured in our film.
Holding a shot steady, where appropriate
Firstly, a tracking shot using a dolly, of the monster of the film dragging his victim down the school corridor. This shot is hard to do and with the use of a dolly we should be able to pull it off to create a variety of shit, and interesting camera movement.

To establish that the school is empty, a number of long shots (once the character had been introduced) Will be at an angle, when edited will be part of a series of jump shots to move time on in the two minutes we are given without ruining the continuity. Together both shots will be at different angles to put the audience more on edge, because when using these shots, subconsciously we are on edge because something isn't right, and the brain will process this, and you will feel the emotion we are trying to create.
(people walking out of school, find out term)

Framing shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate / (shooting material appropriate to the task set)

The close up of the text message on the phone, is now an extereme close up, to further exclude any unnecessary elements, which also reveals the time of which the message was sent (3.08, just after school), which will further sell the fact that this is set after school once we edit in the new long shot scene of the school gates closing and all pupils leaving.

Using a variety of shot distances as appropriate / (shooting material appropriate to the task set)

There was not enough variety shown in our fist draft, a vital shot missing from the piece, which is typically seen in the opening scene of a feature film is a long shot, this establishes the setting, and what we may expect, with distance, to start out journey into the film.